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X's and O's
Contributed by
duff
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Friday, 10th December 2010 @ 01:31:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Their naked bodies ride along my thoughts
Nights I spend shivering beside the lamp
I can hear them whispering to each other
These glass confrontations open my eyes
Broken hearts haunting one earning its scar
Private scenes lure a reality I smile to hide
Choosing to ignore spells of our past serenity
They now applaud my torment with flames
A young man growing old in the face of forgiveness
Curtains tease leaving me alone to reenact this dream
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2010-12-10 01:31:00]
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Re: X's and O's
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by emystar on
Friday, 10th December 2010 @ 01:48:06 PM AEST
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Very interesting, thought provoking write.
Blessings,
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Re: X's and O's
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by Anbarean on
Friday, 10th December 2010 @ 07:55:07 PM AEST
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that a good one I enjoyed it...nicely written
Take care
Abarean |
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Re: X's and O's
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by northernlights on
Saturday, 11th December 2010 @ 12:16:28 AM AEST
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They now Applaud my torment with flames,the depth of expressiveness in each and every line is like a knife drawing across skin to draw blood and ultimately to leave an indelible scar,there are all the ingredients for leaving a person in torment
tortured thoughts, mistrust,brokenness, hidden pain, mocking,hopelessness and abandonment,
great poetry from a continuing very talented writer x |
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Re: X's and O's
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by xHeathenx on
Saturday, 11th December 2010 @ 12:48:52 AM AEST
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It's well written but I just can't relate to it.
Must be a level of emotion I just can't relate to either in
itself or in the phrasing.
Either way, I must say well done. |
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Re: X's and O's
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by UNORTHODOX on
Saturday, 11th December 2010 @ 10:32:12 AM AEST
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This passage somehow with it's imagery
brought to me a collage of emotion in my 30 plus years
like I had yet to experience
a mixture of mystique,sorrow,remorse,and something more chilling
which I'm not quite familiar with
well crafted by one of an elite stature
-Truely-
-UNORTHODOX |
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