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Shelter
Contributed by
UAnwar
on
Thursday, 9th December 2010 @ 07:58:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
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As my perplexed pen pervades the perfection of my play,
I think.
Not of a time where simple thoughts trembled upon the trumpeting of the word,
A call of corrupted memories, ageing authority and self-righteous rhythm,
Where ignorance drifted aimlessly among me.
Not of a time where the scars of tomorrow were restrained behind her veil,
Comforted by the prevailing glow of her luminescent beauty,
They were happy then.
Nor of a time where bitter was sweet and the revolution of time was open for another,
When a flourishing idea was nurtured through water and sun,
Shunned by no creature.
I think.
A time where wings crumble against the grasp of thought,
A confirmation of an incomplete destiny.
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UAnwar
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Re: Shelter
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by Anbarean on
Thursday, 9th December 2010 @ 08:31:18 PM AEST
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Hey Anwar its very different piece of work.
Very nice, interesting and a cool one.
Take care
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Re: Shelter
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by emystar on
Thursday, 9th December 2010 @ 08:34:28 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC.
Good writing.
blessings,
emy |
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Re: Shelter
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by Voyager on
Thursday, 9th December 2010 @ 10:39:03 PM AEST
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| excellent rhythm and flow.......... |
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Re: Shelter
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by northernlights on
Saturday, 11th December 2010 @ 12:25:33 AM AEST
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| A time where wings crumble........ an incomplete destiny,there's a softness and tenderness behind the writing that brings a comfort to hear the words and thoughts,gently reminiscent,then the last two lines powerfully bringing focus and sharpness as the image is destructive and mournful,beautiful and expressive |
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Re: Shelter
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by ming on
Saturday, 11th December 2010 @ 10:18:06 AM AEST
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This line speaks volumes;
'A time where wings crumble against the grasp of thought,
A confirmation of an incomplete destiny.'
Keep writing...
ming
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Re: Shelter
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by emystar on
Thursday, 25th August 2011 @ 04:38:36 AM AEST
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Sorry it's taking me this long to respond to this awesome write.
Blessings,
emy |
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