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Paper Conduit
Contributed by
iodinelove
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Wednesday, 8th December 2010 @ 05:54:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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Discarded
Paper Conduit—
My heart is heavy
Bleeds a sense of loss
Into eyes wilted with words
Written too soon,
Confides in me false aplomb
Leaves me untouched
Left to view old love
Drawn thin, stripped naked,
And chained with the hope
Of a different man
—wrest away my thoughts.
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iodinelove
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2010-12-08 17:54:01] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Paper Conduit
(User Rating: 1 ) by Anbarean on
Thursday, 9th December 2010 @ 12:20:15 AM AEST (User
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Leaves me untouched
Left to view old love
nice one and great effort.
Take care
Anbarean |
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Re: Paper Conduit
(User Rating: 1 ) by Debris on
Thursday, 9th December 2010 @ 03:41:42 AM AEST (User
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I particularly like :
And chained with the hope
Of a different man
Overall a very good piece. I like your writing style. Keep posting.
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Re: Paper Conduit
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Thursday, 9th December 2010 @ 03:40:40 PM AEST (User
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Well hello Abe,
Drawn thin, stripped naked,
And chained with the hope
Of a different man
since u r playing then I don't need to be watching for the naked man.
Good work as always.
smiles,
emy
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Re: Paper Conduit
(User Rating: 1 ) by ming on
Saturday, 11th December 2010 @ 10:06:33 AM AEST (User
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It seems this line grabbed us all;
'Drawn thin, stripped naked,
And chained with the hope
Of a different man'
Niceee. :)
ming
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