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The weight of the world
Contributed by
NewGuy
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Wednesday, 1st December 2010 @ 07:55:41 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Westerly guidance in steady tread
Fleeting soles and mind
Braving elements harsh and cruel
A gilded edge to find
Serpents seek my fortune same
Masked with welcome paint
Venom ready behind the guise
To steal my coveted blade
A weapon of magnificence
Beauty power and delight
Bestowing upon the employer
Fortification against the night
Forces evil do conspire
To snare my steady stride
I carry with me the dreams anew
Of those who know not to hide
I fend off forces unseen
Young optimism still has life
Aged wisdom eat at hope
With bitter enduring strife
Time can steal out smiles
And shift out driving force
Whats important changes overnight
As we follow our course
We no longer see the little things
We become concerned about the news
Cartoons no longer have a place
I our grown up shoes
Youthful giggles and silly things
Combat the stressful day
No job or bills or car repairs
Just run and jump and play
Its up to me to protect youth
To keep their smiles bright
To help embrace life everyday
And not give in to the night
I carry the weight of the world
To show my children two
Of love hope and happiness
And dreams do come true
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NewGuy
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2010-12-01 07:55:41]
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Re: The weight of the world
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by Jonathon_J_Young on
Wednesday, 1st December 2010 @ 09:22:19 AM AEST
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| i think there's some typos there, but i like the mood and the message. |
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Re: The weight of the world
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by northernlights on
Wednesday, 1st December 2010 @ 09:32:46 AM AEST
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| I really like the message this conveys and the wanting to keep this world a brighter world for the sakes of children and a very good reminder to us all as we can so easily get swallowed up by negativity. |
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Re: The weight of the world
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by joelholdsworth on
Thursday, 2nd December 2010 @ 12:29:11 AM AEST
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Very good
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Re: The weight of the world
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by huwbeauty on
Thursday, 2nd December 2010 @ 04:02:43 AM AEST
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| i really like this,very thought provoking. |
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Re: The weight of the world
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by Butterflyperfect on
Thursday, 2nd December 2010 @ 01:41:14 PM AEST
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| I think this conveys a very important message. It is also written well. Very nice. I like it. |
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Re: The weight of the world
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by deusdeira on
Monday, 27th December 2010 @ 09:45:45 AM AEST
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| Ahh I love it. You captured the very essence of the weight of responsibility and the effect it has on people. It is very important as you say, to "not give in to the night." An exemplary write. |
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