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Open Lines
Contributed by
duff
on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 05:12:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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We flirted four years
College, graduation, heavy
Coffee and cigarettes
Next boxes and goodbyes
Then came time to suit up
Busy kept us quiet
Then she called
Nerves trip
I felt high again
Eyes smiling gigantic
That beautiful voice
Steady now man
Dark fell over lines
Our faces hurt
Unlimited laughter
Debating music
Exciting times
Dialing the sun
Copyright ©
duff
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2010-11-29 17:12:06] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Open Lines
(User Rating: 1 ) by sride686 on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 06:58:02 PM AEST (User
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Good write a little different in the last few
lines but well received and I can feel wait
you are conveying. Steve
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Re: Open Lines
(User Rating: 1 ) by cashfan1 on
Tuesday, 30th November 2010 @ 02:02:13 AM AEST (User
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Hi Duff
Once again a delightful piece of writing. The way you weave your words around your chosen subject is really extraordinary. I love this poem and look forward to more from you. Best wishes,
Dennis. |
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Re: Open Lines
(User Rating: 1 ) by huwbeauty on
Tuesday, 30th November 2010 @ 04:35:53 AM AEST (User
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Hi Duff,
really good again,nothing like a blast from the past to get the creative juices flowing.memories can be such powerful yet ephemeral things. |
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Re: Open Lines
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jonathon_J_Young on
Wednesday, 1st December 2010 @ 11:18:37 AM AEST (User
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very cute poem. |
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Re: Open Lines
(User Rating: 1 ) by deusdeira on
Thursday, 2nd December 2010 @ 07:59:55 PM AEST (User
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Sounds like fun, maybe I'll call up some old friends :p thanks for the inspiration. |
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Re: Open Lines
(User Rating: 1 ) by ming on
Thursday, 29th September 2011 @ 08:37:43 PM AEST (User
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Too cute for my tastes...but I heard what you said, I think you can do way better, In fact I know you can. Just sayin.' Nice.
ming |
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