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Mixed
Contributed by
shelby
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Saturday, 27th November 2010 @ 05:35:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Is it possible to think of someone
and in a moment be overcome
with all these mixed emotions?
I smiled when I thought about you
I almost could hear your voice.
Remembering poetic words you wrote
and the music you softly sang.
We laughed so hard we cried, many a time
then at the same time
you would drift and I would lose you
always making me cry, tears soft and humble.
A kiss would have been better
then I think about it all again and smile,
then another tear, you left without a word
over a year now and I wonder, where are you?
I just blow a kiss to the wind,
knowing you wont be back
and if you did decide to show
mixed with a smile a tear a kiss
I would have to say no.
Copyright ©
shelby
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2010-11-27 17:35:26]
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Re: Mixed
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 27th November 2010 @ 06:30:15 PM AEST
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| Very sweet poem! And yes it is very possible to think of someone and be over come with any if not all emotions mixed at the same time. Especially if it was a sudden change of events. |
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Re: Mixed
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by Voyager on
Saturday, 27th November 2010 @ 08:21:52 PM AEST
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| I can relate in many ways...feel what u feel....very nicely written... |
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Re: Mixed
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by duff on
Saturday, 27th November 2010 @ 08:48:49 PM AEST
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I really like how everything seems to snap together. The words,lines, the emotions everything balances the entire write making it a nice piece of poetry. I enjoy the closing because the display of strength and control to say no and protecting yourself is admirable. Well done.
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Re: Mixed
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by emystar on
Saturday, 27th November 2010 @ 09:06:19 PM AEST
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Good work, girlfriend.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Mixed
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by The_Phantom on
Sunday, 28th November 2010 @ 08:02:10 AM AEST
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Well done my friend, a sweet and heartfelt write. Well done.
The Phantom |
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Re: Mixed
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by deusdeira on
Sunday, 28th November 2010 @ 09:45:08 AM AEST
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| i think we can all relate to this, good job. |
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Re: Mixed
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by nrazak1 on
Sunday, 28th November 2010 @ 03:18:03 PM AEST
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Good job.
That was really good! |
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Re: Mixed
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by Fern on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 12:51:48 PM AEST
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| Shelby...you must have thought an awful lot of this person you talk about in your poem...or perhaps the poem is a piece of fiction. Either way, it is delightful to read. You are clearly a sentimental person, one who is given to deeply analyzing your own emotions. I really like your closing lines: "I just blow a kiss to the wind, knowing you won't be back (how sad) and if you did decide to show, mixed with a smile, a tear, a kiss...I would have to say no." A well-thought out and beautiful conclusion to your excellent and wonderfully emotional poem. Keep writing stuff like this. It's incredible and brilliant! |
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Re: Mixed
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by sride686 on
Monday, 29th November 2010 @ 07:11:13 PM AEST
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Really good but then again when is your work not good.
You have always been a good writer and a joy to read
through many trials in my life both here in life and over
seas at war. Thanks again for this piece and I look
forward to exploring some of the other stuff I’ve missed
in my absence from this site. Take care and keep up the
good words that inspire many. It always does hurt to loss
the ones you feel closest to and it hurts more when you
realize that they weren’t the ones for you and they will
never be back. Love is pain most the time and it gives us
one hell of a ride that’s for sure. Steve
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Re: Mixed
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by eggflipper on
Tuesday, 7th December 2010 @ 09:27:29 PM AEST
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| you know its funny, visiting moments of past encounters. i return, years later, and here you are, a perfectly timed piece to reach my eyes. well done. |
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Re: Mixed
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by Anbarean on
Tuesday, 7th December 2010 @ 11:12:23 PM AEST
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Love the last part, so much beauty in this poem that though it titled MIXED put words all together made bright and beautifull..
Takecare
Anbarean |
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