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Broken (Tourniquet)
Contributed by
Black13
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Friday, 26th November 2010 @ 07:09:43 AM in AEST
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Let me pretend this life away
so that my pain doesn't seem
like it's most of what I've been.
Screaming....
Crying...
Still no one can reach through
even though I know you tried.
So please don't wake me
from all I've ever dreamed.
Please don't make me
fall away further than I am.
With everything I do
I'd have done it all for you.
But I can't reach to touch you
when I shoved you away.
I'd give up forever to not feel
all the pain buried deep inside.
I'd give up my soul
to have you forever.
I know it can not be.
It's true you may never see.
Forever I will bear it.
Maybe in dreams I'll see you again.
Copyright ©
Black13
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2010-11-26 07:09:43]
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Re: Broken (Tourniquet)
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by emystar on
Friday, 26th November 2010 @ 12:12:46 PM AEST
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I can totally relate to this from way back in my past.
Keep up the great writing, friend.
Blessings,
emy |
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Re: Broken (Tourniquet)
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by duff on
Friday, 26th November 2010 @ 06:07:58 PM AEST
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A moving write that allows you inside a persons psyche and how much they are suffering. Well written lines that have a mystique about them. This was a nice read. I like the title as well.
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Re: Broken (Tourniquet)
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by deusdeira on
Saturday, 27th November 2010 @ 01:24:41 AM AEST
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| Absolutely beautiful. |
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Re: Broken (Tourniquet)
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by Daniellemarie on
Tuesday, 30th November 2010 @ 03:32:56 PM AEST
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I really like the way your words flowed so nicely enjoyed it alot
-DanielleMarie- |
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Re: Broken (Tourniquet)
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by OnceAnAngel on
Saturday, 1st January 2011 @ 11:07:51 AM AEST
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| after all, what's forever for? |
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Re: Broken (Tourniquet)
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by Breezy on
Friday, 7th January 2011 @ 10:47:02 PM AEST
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OH.! This is crushing. So perfectly pieced.
Hopelessness drips from each frame. Love is indeed a fragile
thing. And the human circumstance after loss is almost unbearable.
You've really captured the heartache here. It is almost too painful to read ..
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Re: Broken (Tourniquet)
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by Depression-chan on
Sunday, 9th January 2011 @ 10:46:44 AM AEST
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| Simple words yet a powerful message. Very pretty. |
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