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My prison
Contributed by
huwbeauty
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Friday, 26th November 2010 @ 02:56:54 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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I wish I could talk,
I know you'd listen,
But I sit in the dark,
Alone in my prison,
Dark shadows embark,
I wonder whats in them,
They carry the mark,
Of conventional wisdom.
And the walls are my ego,
The bars are my pain,
My sentence unknown,
My crime unnamed.
I wish i could walk,
My mountains again,
But i took the wrong fork,
And shouldered the blame,
Yet the song of the lark,
My soul can't refrain,
Destined to stalk,
Bleak nightmares again.
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Re: My prison
(User Rating: 1 ) by duff on
Friday, 26th November 2010 @ 06:12:34 PM AEST (User
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What an awesome write! This is great. A flood of emotion that roars like a river carrying you through all the way to the end. Everything fits beautifully and I'm glad you shared this. I believe each of us have our own demons and sometimes those demons can shackle us from all that is good. Well done.
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Re: My prison
(User Rating: 1 ) by brialuv on
Saturday, 27th November 2010 @ 03:54:10 PM AEST (User
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a unique and outstanding poem...great job |
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Re: My prison
(User Rating: 1 ) by nirupam on
Sunday, 28th November 2010 @ 09:00:42 AM AEST (User
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a very nicely worked out piece that explores its theme so well...congrats.... |
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Re: My prison
(User Rating: 1 ) by sride686 on
Sunday, 28th November 2010 @ 01:35:40 PM AEST (User
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Another good piece it has a beautiful flow of words and
emotions from the start to the end and culminates with
these final lines I really like.
Yet the song of the lark,
My soul can't refrain,
Destined to stalk,
Bleak nightmares again
Good to read and I can relate to the emotions of blame
in this write and closing yourself off to the ones that
would help you through. Take care and keep your head
up and just write to get the thoughts out that you cant
share with others. Steve
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