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A Trail of Petals
Contributed by
northernlights
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Tuesday, 23rd November 2010 @ 06:34:19 AM in AEST
Topic:
ChildrensPoetry
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Winter cannot ever fail, to bring to life a fairytale!
Wicked Enchantress with eyes of green,
Driven by evil to plot and scheme!
Everlasting love between Prince and Princess,
Only fuels the fires of her wickedness!
A Princess imprisoned and robbed of choice!
Never to hear the call of her Prince’s voice!
Evil banished her love and buried it deep,
The earth now its castle forever to keep.
Then It banished her Prince to land far away,
Both living their sadness day after day.
A flower of death grew from love denied,
And with tears of blood then lilies cried.
On snowfall drops of crimson flows,
From every tear there sprang a rose.
The sweetest perfume of love so fair,
A scent unknown from flower so rare.
Love banished to the depths in earthy tomb,
Yet from desperation sprang a perfect bloom.
Princess is dying and paying the highest cost,
For prince and princess their future seems lost.
In through a window his destiny calls,
As in to his hand a rose petal falls.
It seemed like a message from the gods above,
As he could feel the warmth of enduring love.
And so onward he journeyed as a travelling stranger,
Through lands far and wide he faced many a danger.
Through the snow ,exhausted fell to his knees,
Then up to follow petals carried by the breeze.
Eventually they lead him to lilies crying their tears,
And he added his own with the release of his fears.
Reward for his pursuit and endless endeavour,
Was their hearts reunited forever and ever.
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2010-11-23 06:34:19]
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Re: A Trail of Petals
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by DrogedaRain on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2010 @ 06:40:00 AM AEST
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| Nice flow and imagery. I, however do not feel this is childrens poetry. I really love it. =) Looking forward to the next one.. Peace and Blessings.... |
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Re: A Trail of Petals
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by duff on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2010 @ 10:16:10 AM AEST
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I admire your knack to be able to tell a story and convey exactly what you intend. Beautiful imagery and a mind full of creativity. Great lines and fantastic execution.
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Re: A Trail of Petals
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by cashfan1 on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2010 @ 10:34:00 AM AEST
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Hi Anna
you really have hit the bullseye with this one. It is packed with vivid images and is full of creativity,
I love this. Thanks so much for sharing such a fine piece of poetry. |
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Re: A Trail of Petals
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2010 @ 09:22:06 PM AEST
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| I think you're getting better and better with every new poem. Not only have you told a great story you rhymed it with a perfect flow without anything at all seeming forced. Now that is damn excellence!!!! |
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Re: A Trail of Petals
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2010 @ 11:38:24 PM AEST
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This is lovely! Beautiful work here.
Hugs
Michelle |
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Re: A Trail of Petals
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by Butterflyperfect on
Wednesday, 24th November 2010 @ 01:57:08 PM AEST
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| Imagery, creativity, flow.... a great poem. |
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Re: A Trail of Petals
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by emystar on
Thursday, 25th November 2010 @ 03:00:08 AM AEST
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An awesome write.
The words just come to life on the page.
Blessings, Happy Thanksgiving,
emy |
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Re: A Trail of Petals
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by mehuel on
Thursday, 25th November 2010 @ 11:01:16 PM AEST
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| great write, good flow of imagination, enjoyed the narration of a sweet story in great poetry.. |
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Re: A Trail of Petals
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by Eclipse_of_the_Moon on
Saturday, 27th November 2010 @ 02:48:31 PM AEST
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| this is beautifully done. a story in a poem... that is a hard thing to do, but you pulled it off very well. Please continue with such beautiful work. |
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Re: A Trail of Petals
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by Anoo on
Friday, 14th January 2011 @ 07:13:43 AM AEST
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It is truly a fairy tale poem. A story gradually unfolds effortlessly with perfect rhyming and beautiful metaphores.
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Re: A Trail of Petals
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by StacyLynnG on
Tuesday, 15th February 2011 @ 11:30:00 AM AEST
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| What a romantic poem! Love the rythem and flow, and a story that makes your heart melt! Beautiful and thank you! |
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Re: A Trail of Petals
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by ReeseTJ on
Monday, 14th March 2011 @ 05:19:47 PM AEST
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| Well done! We enjoyed it very much. |
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Re: A Trail of Petals
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by Cynthia on
Sunday, 6th July 2014 @ 04:14:52 PM AEST
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What a beautifully penned piece of poetry. Well done. :O) Keep on penning. Keep up with the great work. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful talents with us. We all truly appreciate it.
*S* Cynthia |
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