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I Wait For You
Contributed by
duff
on
Monday, 22nd November 2010 @ 04:16:23 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Inside the gold mine
I sift through testimony
Transcripts of love
Can’t erase the verdict
A gig for memory
We couldn’t be saved
Saturday night reflections
Wondering if you’re alright
Our song in store for me
I can’t escape this
Groceries for two
I wait for your return
Alone on that drive to work
Isolation opens me up
Sidewalk couples laugh
A snapshot of what used to be
Please come home
The door is open
I promise you change
I promise I will change
Copyright ©
duff
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2010-11-22 16:16:23] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: I Wait For You
(User Rating: 1 ) by nirupam on
Monday, 22nd November 2010 @ 07:20:43 PM AEST (User
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Excellent working out of the theme of love...the right kind of language to suggest what lies deep and pulsating...love the closing refrain... |
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Re: I Wait For You
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Monday, 22nd November 2010 @ 10:44:16 PM AEST (User
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I can relate.
good work full of hope for a return.
Good writing.
Blessings,
emy |
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Re: I Wait For You
(User Rating: 1 ) by Anbarean on
Monday, 22nd November 2010 @ 11:08:00 PM AEST (User
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wow you always write something which touch my heart...
Specialy your last few lines shows how the pain and want the person back in life.....What a feeling you put in words...
Love it
Anbarean |
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Re: I Wait For You
(User Rating: 1 ) by northernlights on
Monday, 22nd November 2010 @ 11:59:44 PM AEST (User
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A painful outpouring of the heart,with the rich declaration of love and the pleading for reconciliation,written in blood x |
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Re: I Wait For You
(User Rating: 1 ) by cashfan1 on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2010 @ 10:40:03 AM AEST (User
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Hi Duff
you keep rising the bar ever higher. Your talent is so obvious. This is an inspiring piece, written with truth and much sensitivity. Fine job my friend. Well done. |
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Re: I Wait For You
(User Rating: 1 ) by deusdeira on
Tuesday, 21st December 2010 @ 02:14:00 PM AEST (User
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"sidewalk couples laugh" isn't that just the most painful thing to see after a breakup. It sure is for me. Almost as bad as seeing the person. Always wondering if they are ok, and feeling alone. You captured it very well. |
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