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The Sandcastle
Contributed by
Lyre
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Saturday, 30th October 2010 @ 08:27:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Kneeling and scooping on sand,
Wet and firm sand with hand,
To build sandcastle of mine,
That a summer winds won't dine;
And in it I glued my sweat,
As I kneed and shape on peat;
The floors--it's attic, the whole,
I form for a breath a hole,
Then dancing with beach breezes,
Proud and satisfied;caresses,
Suddenly, comes a hassle;
On every corners stand storks,
Wave splashed and swallowed my work,
Then porous sand, all was left,
And as I wail, waves fade while laughing,
As winds is bowing and pitying.
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Lyre
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2010-10-30 20:27:20]
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Re: The Sandcastle
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by Balmain_Tiger on
Monday, 1st November 2010 @ 05:24:54 AM AEST
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A word or two makes so much difference.
Done it myself too.
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Re: The Sandcastle
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by duff on
Monday, 1st November 2010 @ 09:38:52 PM AEST
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Vivid imagery and your words fit beautifully. Well done.
duff |
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