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Reflections
Contributed by
jonquilcottage
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Monday, 25th October 2010 @ 08:39:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
Nostalgic
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Reflections
Reflections can mean many things that make your life complete
from sitting in a restaurant and watching people eat.
Driving down the highway seeing someone hitch a ride
smiling at some stranger when your true feelings you hide.
I love children playing happily out on the grassy patch
when seeing lovers walk and kiss, your breath you have to catch
listening to the elderly talk of their youthful days
all of these things from time to time on your mind they play
just the simpliest things can make you cry whether happy tears or sad
but in this life you have to take the good along with the bad
so one day when your sitting out on that rocking chair
remember while watching life go drifting by without all of its care
You have given that lift and nursed those babes playing peacefully
sat in that busy restaurant and talked so gleefully
had that kiss and still can feel his hand wrapped up in yours
and closer now you get to those twilight years doors
and so reflections are what makes you like you are today
without them what a boring life would constantly portray
so take each one gently and file it in your mind
as it is our constant reminder of what we have left behind
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Re: Reflections
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by po-it on
Monday, 25th October 2010 @ 10:07:19 PM AEST
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I love the honest expression. Genuine and real phrases. I like the word gleefully. I love rhymes in poetry and respect you for maintaining meaningful rhymes.
Not to be rigid, but along with rhymes I love it when the lines have the same "musical length" and it seems like you have the talent to produce that. If I may suggest an example,
so take each one gently and file it in your mind
as a constant reminder of what we left behind
In my ear it sounds more harmonies.
It feels like, from the flow of your poem that you had the end in mind when you started. I've written like that before. I do not know how you write or what your style is, but I've really enjoyed writing without an end in site and seeing where the poem leads me.
Looking forward to reading more of your work. |
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Re: Reflections
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by duff on
Tuesday, 26th October 2010 @ 12:44:22 PM AEST
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A well written poem that takes us back and lets us remember fragments in a body of time. A well thought out reminder of how the past brought us shape. Great write.
take care
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Re: Reflections
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by Lyre on
Friday, 29th October 2010 @ 04:18:33 AM AEST
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| I enjoy reading your poem! |
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