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Where Your Feelings Lay
Contributed by
lissa132
on
Tuesday, 5th October 2010 @ 10:45:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I wish feelings existed at the side of a lake
That way if I ever needed not to feel an emotion,
I can swim to the other side.
Unfortunately feelings do exist at the side of a lake.
They circulate, drift with the water, and find you despite the
Distance.
I wish feelings existed at the bottom of the stairs
That way if I ever needed an escape,
I can always pass them and climb up.
Unfortunately feelings do exist at the bottom of the stairs.
No matter how far up you climb, you must come back
Down.
I wish feelings existed at the tip top of the tallest trees
That way if I ever wanted to avoid them,
I can just never look up.
Unfortunately feelings do exist in trees.
Winter brings about barren trees that hide
Nothing.
I wish feelings existed in the dirt.
That way if I ever needed to overcome them,
I can just stomp my feet.
Unfortunately feelings do exist in the dirt.
No matter how hard you stomp, the traces stay with
You.
I wish I could forget or run away.
I wish feelings were something easily outmaneuvered.
I wish they existed everywhere but within.
Unfortunately they exist everywhere AND within.
Don’t run. Face
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Re: Where Your Feelings Lay
(User Rating: 1 ) by nrazak1 on
Wednesday, 6th October 2010 @ 08:00:58 AM AEST (User
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Wow. I think that was amazingly written.
It's true. We can't run away from our feelings or problem. We have to stand and face them. That kinda gave me a new perspective on things. Awesome job!
-Naadiya |
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Re: Where Your Feelings Lay
(User Rating: 1 ) by chrisdavid on
Wednesday, 6th October 2010 @ 01:19:24 PM AEST (User
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This is great!! Very cleverly written as well. Brilliant!
Take care, Chris. |
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Re: Where Your Feelings Lay
(User Rating: 1 ) by RowenM on
Wednesday, 6th October 2010 @ 03:44:34 PM AEST (User
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The lake and the dirt...amazing.
Seriously, this poem is just real and so true.
I think everyone can identify with it.
Congratulations! I loved it. |
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Re: Where Your Feelings Lay
(User Rating: 1 ) by waldenpond on
Wednesday, 6th October 2010 @ 10:34:18 PM AEST (User
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Great job! I loved this. The title grabbed me, the body of the poem is honest and the point is both clear and succinct. I really enjoyed this poem. |
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Re: Where Your Feelings Lay
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 7th October 2010 @ 05:18:59 PM AEST (User
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A good poem, well expressed.
-Phil |
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Re: Where Your Feelings Lay
(User Rating: 1 ) by regetful on
Saturday, 9th October 2010 @ 10:48:54 PM AEST (User
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I understand a little how you feel... I wish I didn't have to go through the pain of losing a person dear to me... It would be great if we could escape the sadness and in my case the anger of that loss... (because i wasn't allowed leave to go to the funeral) |
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Re: Where Your Feelings Lay
(User Rating: 1 ) by Hooligan785 on
Saturday, 9th October 2010 @ 11:45:59 PM AEST (User
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this is a very good poem!!!!well written |
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