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Rose
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Saturday, 19th April 2003 @ 04:05:00 PM in AEST
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I see a rose
Beautiful, red, innocent,
But surrounded by cruel thorns
In my haste and blindness
The beauty of the rose
Captivates me, steals my senses
In my whimpering, childlike state
I crawl, unworthy, to the rose
Reach up a scarred, muddied hand
So it can be mine
My arm bloodied and torn
Skin singed by the thorns,
But the rose is mine!
I persevered despite the pain
Blood falls singing to the ground
Joyous to be free from me,
But like a bumbling, clumsy idiot
I crush the rose, fragile now broken
The petals drift to the ground
And lie at my feet, broken and sad
I stare not wanting to admit
I destroyed something so beautiful
And I know what they represent
An animal cry emits from me
Because everything beautiful I destroy
And I keep moving on... like a disease
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2003-04-19 16:05:00]
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Re: Rose
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Saturday, 19th April 2003 @ 04:27:36 PM AEST
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Oh, this is sad....
Definately not pretty,
But an awesome write anyway!
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Re: Rose
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by AngryPrincess on
Saturday, 19th April 2003 @ 04:36:15 PM AEST
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aww joel, this is beautiful...(BETTER the pretty) because its honest...you're not sugar coating anything, its how you feel...its amazing...
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Re: Rose
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by shelby on
Saturday, 19th April 2003 @ 10:06:52 PM AEST
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very honest poem I like it
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Re: Rose
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by flirtyrockstar on
Sunday, 20th April 2003 @ 12:21:32 AM AEST
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| omg this is so good. I love how everything leads up to the last lines. |
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Re: Rose
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Sunday, 20th April 2003 @ 01:25:10 AM AEST
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twisted and sad, was an excellent read.
Keep it up. |
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Re: Rose
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by WordPoet on
Saturday, 26th April 2003 @ 02:43:05 AM AEST
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You always seem to bring out the darker side of beauty in your poems, casting a shadow with your tragic words. A shadow cannot exist however without light and so some beauty always shines through.
As usual well written.... |
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Re: Rose
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 28th April 2003 @ 08:36:25 PM AEST
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dearest joel, you have captured beauty, but at what cost? very vivid interesting write:)
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Rose
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by Cancer on
Tuesday, 29th April 2003 @ 06:59:37 PM AEST
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just cuz it's not about puppies and sunshine, doesn't mean it's not pretty. i thought it was beautiful. vivid story beneath the metaphor. great write.
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Re: Rose
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by deadly_blaZe on
Friday, 6th June 2003 @ 06:24:19 PM AEST
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| this is vivid! i love it! ur awesome! i cant wait to read more! keep it up! |
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Re: Rose
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by undead_poet14 on
Saturday, 5th July 2003 @ 08:04:51 PM AEST
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| excellent, bobo... wondeful imagery... i could picture it all! absolutely beautiful... keep writing ;) |
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