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Run away together.
Contributed by
Bexstasy
on
Saturday, 11th September 2010 @ 10:05:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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If I could, I'd take you by the hand,
We'd run away together,
We'd drive until the sun collapsed,
And watch the change of weather,
We'd pull up at the road side,
And let the world drift by,
You'd offer me a cup of tea,
And I'd sip it with a sigh,
We'd wander over to the nearest hill,
And then you'd pull me near,
You'd whisper softly words of love,
All the words I love to hear,
Soon we'd both get really tired,
So we'd share a cozy blanket,
We'd cuddle up and feel the warmth,
And talk of how we met,
When I wake, you're still asleep,
And I wonder if you're dreaming,
I watch you as you gently smile,
Then I notice some water gleaming,
I pull on a jacket and head for the lake,
And soon you're by my side,
We hold hands as we walk,
It feels almost like we glide,
Then suddenly I'm falling,
But slowly, like a feather,
Yes, if I could, I'd take you by the hand,
And we'd run away together.
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Re: Run away together.
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by SilentMuse on
Saturday, 11th September 2010 @ 10:49:39 AM AEST
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| I like the imagery, it really takes you into the poem. Kinda like a good book. |
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Re: Run away together.
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by chrisdavid on
Saturday, 11th September 2010 @ 11:44:10 AM AEST
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Great rhythm and rhyme in this one. Excellent!
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Re: Run away together.
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 11th September 2010 @ 04:19:42 PM AEST
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You describe the scene perfectly, so much so that it's hard not to conjure up the image in your mind.
"We'd drive until the sun collapsed" is my favourite line, one of those lines as a reader you wish you had written yourself !!
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Re: Run away together.
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by iiloveyouxx19 on
Saturday, 11th September 2010 @ 09:08:31 PM AEST
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| i love your rhyming scheme seeing as you manage to put such description as well! keep up the good work. |
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Re: Run away together.
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by GuyJular on
Saturday, 18th September 2010 @ 09:11:28 PM AEST
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| nicely written i really like this one. |
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