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Baby, If You Ever Doubted Me.
Contributed by
pat346
on
Wednesday, 8th September 2010 @ 03:48:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Like a stormcloud she rolls in
and starts pouring down the rain
she studies the shifting of my eyes
before feeling comfortable again
the throne he sat on was on her back
but her heart was his to hold
until he grew tired
and I'm here just to console
eventually her hands became
colder, well closer without his name
she smiled like I was the sun
and all she had seen was rain
When night would come I'd meet her there
where the seabreeze would toss her seasalt hair
Her hand was home to mine
and she said "everything's gonna be fine"
Not always fine.
Not every time.
Not ever.
But if you doubted me
If you doubted that I love you.
You can ask my friends
Or the moon you see above you
You can ask the ocean
Or the cars that we've ridden in
You can ask the shooting stars
or the girls that I've seen since
You can ask my guitar
Or my notepad, Or my Microphone
You can ask the messages
I never leave on your cell phone
You can ask everything anyone at all
You can ask a medium or ask a crystal ball
So if you ever doubted me
If you doubted that I love you.
Ask yourself, if you loved me.
Cause I know that I made you.
I can't breathe without you
Please come back.
Please.
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Re: Baby, If You Ever Doubted Me.
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by pinkunicornoctober on
Wednesday, 8th September 2010 @ 04:28:09 PM AEST
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| Wow! This was very BEAUTIFUL! It would make a great song I think. I love your writing! |
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Re: Baby, If You Ever Doubted Me.
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by iiloveyouxx19 on
Wednesday, 8th September 2010 @ 06:00:47 PM AEST
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| This is very emotional! I love it. And i'm sorry that you have to face this, doubt can be surpassed though. I wish the best for you in the future and I hope that everything turns out alright in the end. Keep up the excellent writing, writing of your kind is not common and i like the unique style. |
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Re: Baby, If You Ever Doubted Me.
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by ming on
Wednesday, 8th September 2010 @ 08:24:11 PM AEST
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This line really jumped out at me;
'When night would come I'd meet her there
where the seabreeze would toss her seasalt hair'
Nice write and 'love' poems are normaly not my thing.
ming :) |
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Re: Baby, If You Ever Doubted Me.
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 9th September 2010 @ 03:28:40 PM AEST
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Good god, it's just heartbreaking. Reading this, you can just feel the raw pain. I'm lost at what else to say...but this is a great poem.
-Phil |
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Re: Baby, If You Ever Doubted Me.
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by voyage on
Monday, 13th September 2010 @ 03:00:43 PM AEST
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This is so inspiring and moving. I'm sorry that you have to go through this but what a beauty it radiates when emotions unfold. Keep on writing, and thank you for sharing.
TG |
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Re: Baby, If You Ever Doubted Me.
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by natizzle on
Tuesday, 14th September 2010 @ 10:01:53 PM AEST
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| this is absolutely beautiful, favourite poem ive read so far to be completely honest. I love the raw emotion and the images. Thanks :) |
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