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Shadow Dream.
Contributed by
cashfan1
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Sunday, 5th September 2010 @ 03:09:35 AM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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In a winter wood I came upon a shadow.
Wearied by loneliness it haunted this wild desolate place.
No breeze stirred, no birds sang, no fox barked
And no badger groveled in the earth of his sect.
The air hung heavy with a dark premonition.
I looked above me at the rising tree line,
The tall branches stripped bare by the season's wrath.
I sat on a stump of oak and watched fragments of sky
Penetrate the gaps in the trees
And all around the woodland floor trembled,
The air echoed with hollow laughter,
A pale imitation of happiness.
From somewhere far distant thunder grumbled,
Lightening forked and split the tree line.
I stood up and embraced the advancing shadow,
Entered its loneliness and claimed my birthright.
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2010-09-05 03:09:35]
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Re: Shadow Dream.
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by Debris on
Sunday, 5th September 2010 @ 06:23:02 AM AEST
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| I really like this CF1, though I'm slightly biased as I do a good bit of dream work in my job. Dreams are such an amazing source for writers- and they're all your own unique thoughts. In this piece I can feel the fear and uncertainty, yet the strength in the ending. I particularly like "A pale irritation of happiness", what a great sentence. Thanks for posting. |
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Re: Shadow Dream.
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by spud on
Sunday, 5th September 2010 @ 08:30:47 AM AEST
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Hi Dennis,
Spooky! Hope it's not catching, this was too
realistic for me.
Well scripted, scribe!
Tommy
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Re: Shadow Dream.
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 5th September 2010 @ 03:02:36 PM AEST
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Crikey, this almost makes my dreams look optimistic. They say dreams are just the brain's way of trying to resolve problems, in my experience they tend to create more problems than they solve.
-Phil |
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Re: Shadow Dream.
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by thebadguy9999 on
Sunday, 5th September 2010 @ 08:32:50 PM AEST
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| nice |
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Re: Shadow Dream.
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 26th September 2010 @ 11:12:08 AM AEST
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| sweet |
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