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Thought Ward.
Contributed by
cashfan1
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Wednesday, 25th August 2010 @ 09:53:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Even though this room is united
In concern for you
The loneliness is savage,
A wild beast pacing
The corridors of my mind.
I watch you laying there devout in a belief
That all will be well
And I find I cannot live up to the expectation
You might have of me..
You are quiet and your face, protruding from a mask,
Is grey with times unwavering gift to surprise.
A grubby white hospital sheet cannot hide your suffering,
Cannot disguise your bones as they lay
In an ever shrinking gown of flesh.
I make light of your undiluted concerns
And as I turn from your bed to leave
You flash me a glance and I am aghast at the thoughts I have,
And in that one glance, that one moment,
I know I am seeing my own reflection in your suffering,
Perhaps my mirror image in years to come.
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cashfan1
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2010-08-25 09:53:22]
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Re: Thought Ward.
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by UNORTHODOX on
Wednesday, 25th August 2010 @ 10:34:57 AM AEST
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Profound -you painted a picture only experience can induce
poetically sound and such an honor to read
your words speak for many
who will eventually have to face life's grimmer side
well composed
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Re: Thought Ward.
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by Daniellemarie on
Wednesday, 25th August 2010 @ 11:00:09 PM AEST
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This is very sad and honest good job
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Re: Thought Ward.
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by ming on
Thursday, 26th August 2010 @ 08:43:10 AM AEST
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Good, but a little wordy. Just my opinion.
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Re: Thought Ward.
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by spud on
Saturday, 28th August 2010 @ 11:15:39 AM AEST
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Hi Dennis,
There, but for the grace of God, go I.
It's not uncommon to see ourselves in the
sufferings of others. The older we get the more
often it happens.
Well scripted heartfelt piece of verse.
Tommy
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