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Nightfall Curtain
Contributed by
Illegible_Fairy
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Monday, 9th August 2010 @ 06:39:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Fate: The maddening of nightfall.
Besotted as I was, worshiping at the statue of your failures,
As I too was once the object of worship.
It was your flattery that was all too true,
That persuaded love to bloom;
Criticism, that killed it.
Nothing ever changes - only roles.
Those of us who learn our lesson,
Go on to teach those who have not;
Only in this case,
There is nothing for you to learn.
The eternal mirror has grasped your fancy --
You wish nothing but to look inward forever.
Not even I can break that spell.
See the patterns in your woodwork, waiting there --
No word at arms, no word at all.
Shut doors, locked hearts - faltering footsteps.
How can one miss you, for the time they spend alone in dreams?
Locked in your reality you are, with never a spare to share,
For the apparent undeserving
Who rest beneath the nightfall where the curtain fell.
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Illegible_Fairy
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Re: Nightfall Curtain
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 9th August 2010 @ 08:30:09 PM AEST
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I'd be a liar if I said I completely understood every line in this poem but even so, I like the style of it and think it's well written.
I really relate, however, to the first stanza a lot and it's definitely my favorite.
I was thinking as soon as I read the author's note "what if the charm is true" and you seem to strike upon that right away.
Anways, thank you for an enjoyable read and  to YPDC.
Tim
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Re: Nightfall Curtain
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by quadira on
Tuesday, 10th August 2010 @ 03:09:45 AM AEST
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| My goodness this is fantastically poetic. I love the style. I would love to know the inspiration for this write. |
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Re: Nightfall Curtain
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 10th August 2010 @ 04:43:18 AM AEST
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I would echo a lot of Timotheus' sentiments. At times incomprehensible, at times beautiful. To say this is your first ever poem on here, you've certainly got a lot of potential to build on. Just try and make your language a bit clearer and you'll be right on your way.
-Phil |
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Re: Nightfall Curtain
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by waldenpond on
Friday, 13th August 2010 @ 12:14:49 AM AEST
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| great write. i won't pretend, like the others, that i get every line, but i enjoyed the read. great job. |
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Re: Nightfall Curtain
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by emystar on
Monday, 8th April 2013 @ 01:44:07 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC.
Great writing and very thought provoking.
Blessings,
emy |
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