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My Sugar Coated Love Connection
Contributed by
allforyou
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Friday, 6th August 2010 @ 12:04:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I'd never cry whenever you would leave,
we were hanging from nothing but a shoestring.
I'd accepted your prospective 'you & me,'
for you there was no way that we could ever be.
I would commit if you'd permit my heart's affection,
oh, how you made grey my sugar coated love connection.
I'd give it up if that meant we were us,
it's come to be easy to mistake love for lust.
This game at hand it just never could suit,
my heart which longs for nothing but pursuit.
But I cannot seem to help infatuation,
I am the key and you are locked in my imagination.
I don't think that you understand my logic,
or these feelings that I have trapped in my pocket.
How many times you've lied in lieu of living,
and I can only dream of the love that you're not giving.
Crickets hiccup quickly through my veins,
the space between us is getting harder to maintain.
Have we, thus far, been nothing but repetitive,
I give, you take; sometimes you're so insensitive.
I only wish that time had been our friend,
and allowed a little more for me and you, for us to spend.
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2010-08-06 12:04:34]
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Re: My Sugar Coated Love Connection
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by emystar on
Friday, 6th August 2010 @ 02:15:12 PM AEST
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This is a well written, unique write.
One can feel the tugging between the heart and the mind, and body.
I think we all can relate to this in our lives many times over.
Great job and the message comes across clear for the reader.
Blessings,
emy
I really enjoyed this work of art.
My point is instead of babbling you had something to say. |
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Re: My Sugar Coated Love Connection
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 6th August 2010 @ 03:12:48 PM AEST
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A very sad ending. there were so nice little couplets here, I especially liked:
'oh, how you made grey my sugar coated love connection.'
'my heart which longs for nothing but pursuit.'
'Crickets hiccup quickly through my veins,'
An interesting image there. I can just imagine on a medical drama, somebody being diagnosed with crickets in their veins...
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Re: My Sugar Coated Love Connection
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 6th August 2010 @ 03:20:35 PM AEST
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The title is one of those stand out kind of titles that instantly grab your attention.
An interesting and unique write.It was hard to predict what was coming next, which I liked.
Nice work
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Re: My Sugar Coated Love Connection
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by unknown_utopia on
Monday, 9th August 2010 @ 10:04:34 PM AEST
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oh my thie flow is so powerful yes....
Head games make us
thee emotionally tortured
see through tears of saddness.
take care
of the hole in your sole
it will heal
with time....... |
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