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These Words
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Tuesday, 3rd August 2010 @ 09:52:53 AM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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These words are all I have left
Like a widow I’m bereft
Of a place, a space in time
Some words in prose, some in rhyme
All this work is left unfinished
The value somehow diminished
Promises just made to be broke
Another scribble you provoke
You can’t see my tears and you won’t
Catch me falling because I don’t
Pick up the pieces off the ground
Dust me off for another round
I’m setting fire to a flame
I’m getting tired of the game
Fighting for breath from the chase
Running but stuck in one place
Struggling to look in the mirror
Disappointment lingers near
I jumped the hoop that you asked
Dug deep into my own past
Breathed life into these deadened thoughts
Well **** you, ‘cause I can’t be bought
Out to sea, that ship has sailed now
The show is over, take a bow.
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hauntedscorp
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Re: These Words
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by unknown_utopia on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2010 @ 10:40:08 AM AEST
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I like the way this flow'd
love that line
"Running but stuck in one place" |
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Re: These Words
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by allforyou on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2010 @ 11:00:49 AM AEST
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My favorite part of this is: "I'm setting fire to a flame/ I'm getting tired of the game/ Fighting for breath from the chase/ Running but stuck in place."
Like you're doing all you can, but still have gotten no closer to your goal and you're sick of it.
-Kara |
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Re: These Words
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2010 @ 01:25:56 PM AEST
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Sad but very powerful, well written words.
Dust me off for another round
Some times life just seems like one big round, over and over again.
Awesome work.
huggs, blessings,
emy |
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Re: These Words
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2010 @ 10:05:21 PM AEST
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You have always had a way of dishing things out with a killer flow skill. I don't know what brought you back out of retirement but I hope this is helping.
ulTIMate
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Re: These Words
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 6th August 2010 @ 07:05:08 AM AEST
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A very well composed rhyming poem. I especially liked this line:
'I’m setting fire to a flame'
I know the feeling!
-Phil |
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Re: These Words
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 6th August 2010 @ 04:04:52 PM AEST
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These words..........................are just perfect, like a cool breeze on a stifling summer day.
You've managed to knit so many great lines with such skill into a piece that really does work brilliantly.
Time to read it again I think !!!
Steve |
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Re: These Words
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by TsunamiWaverider on
Sunday, 19th September 2010 @ 08:08:16 PM AEST
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Exactly how does one "set fire to a flame"? LOL
Nice trick. |
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Re: These Words
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 10th May 2014 @ 01:45:34 PM AEST
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i can really relate to this one, too much even, my
heart is beating faster, you just described my life,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: These Words
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by JamesStockdale on
Monday, 12th December 2016 @ 10:04:30 PM AEST
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Wonderful and inspirational write!
James |
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