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CAN I HAVE SOME WINE WITH THIS PLEASE?
Contributed by
andrewjones12
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Tuesday, 3rd August 2010 @ 06:54:07 AM in AEST
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Loath atrociously
Seize obscure philosophies
Life milked, makes sour cheese.
-can I have some wine with this please?
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andrewjones12
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2010-08-03 06:54:07] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: CAN I HAVE SOME WINE WITH THIS PLEASE?
(User Rating: 1 ) by xXInkInMyVeinsXx on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2010 @ 07:11:00 AM AEST (User
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I really like this; my only problem is that the lines don't quite connect as well as I would like them to but it's very deep and made me think so great job :) |
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Re: CAN I HAVE SOME WINE WITH THIS PLEASE?
(User Rating: 1 ) by cashfan1 on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2010 @ 07:16:27 AM AEST (User
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Nice job Andrew,
the words make a connection, well writen,
I look forward to more. |
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Re: CAN I HAVE SOME WINE WITH THIS PLEASE?
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2010 @ 08:09:36 AM AEST (User
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5/7/5 |
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Re: CAN I HAVE SOME WINE WITH THIS PLEASE?
(User Rating: 1 ) by allforyou on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2010 @ 11:33:52 AM AEST (User
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Great write. Keep 'em coming.
-Kara |
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Re: CAN I HAVE SOME WINE WITH THIS PLEASE?
(User Rating: 1 ) by unknown_utopia on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2010 @ 11:44:12 AM AEST (User
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HA HA HA |
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Re: CAN I HAVE SOME WINE WITH THIS PLEASE?
(User Rating: 1 ) by andrewjones12 on
Wednesday, 4th August 2010 @ 06:35:28 AM AEST (User
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re:5/7/5,
sorry folks! undercounted syllables! milked=2.
well, i'd edit it but i dont know i can. so mabey ill write it like this,
"milk life; make sour cheese."
better? |
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