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Just Me
Contributed by
lesoleilnoire
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Thursday, 29th July 2010 @ 01:17:18 AM in AEST
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Haiku
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Your life seems worthless;
you don't have any money.
All you have is me.
Copyright ©
lesoleilnoire
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2010-07-29 01:17:18]
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Re: Just Me
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 29th July 2010 @ 01:22:54 AM AEST
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Yikes that is sad. The materialism does take over our lives, does it not? 'Tis sad indeed.
On a happier note, though, you still have that power to cause tears to form spontaneously with so few words.
Tim
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Re: Just Me
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by Manic on
Thursday, 29th July 2010 @ 04:05:58 AM AEST
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| great i liked it! |
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Re: Just Me
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by cashfan1 on
Thursday, 29th July 2010 @ 04:18:42 AM AEST
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Brilliant! in these few words you sum up perfectly all that is wrong with our society,
very powerful and wonderfuly writen. |
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Re: Just Me
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by andrewjones12 on
Thursday, 29th July 2010 @ 07:26:43 AM AEST
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BEAUTIFUL! so powerfull few words can be.
my favorite kind of messenge is here, short, sweet, and to the point.
well done!
more please.
-andrew. |
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Re: Just Me
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by JakerBaker88 on
Thursday, 29th July 2010 @ 08:28:06 PM AEST
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| I liked where this haiku was going, but I felt it was way too abrupt. I would've liked to have had some more insight into what inspired this piece. A few well placed words or another line could help do that. All in all, I enjoyed the emotion behind your haiku. Take care. |
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