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poem of love and malice
Contributed by
Daniellemarie
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Thursday, 29th July 2010 @ 12:14:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Divine as you were, like holy grounds I worshipped every inch of your body.
You were as smooth as your lips brushed across my neck, it lasted for about as long as
I could take it. Hollow was your soul like diving in to an empty pool, sill every
morning I wake up next to another man that is not you, I wonder to myself
how did I get in to this tangled web I weaved so secretly well.
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Re: poem of love and malice
(User Rating: 1 ) by cashfan1 on
Thursday, 29th July 2010 @ 04:21:49 AM AEST (User
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Very well writen, you make the words flow so smoothly and highlight the situation so well. thanks for posting. |
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Re: poem of love and malice
(User Rating: 1 ) by lovingcritters on
Friday, 30th July 2010 @ 07:36:39 AM AEST (User
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WELCOME TO YPDC Daniellemarie! We're so glad to have you join us here. Welcome aboard!
I especially liked the ending of your poem. It's so true, and always will be.
We weave our own webs my the choices we make in life, and I loved this part, "Secretly" well! We rationalize, and make excuses, and since our hearts are treacherous, and always want, want, want, we fail to reason with our heads,
That was excellent!
Warm love
consue |
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