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on puzzles
Contributed by
polaris773
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Monday, 26th July 2010 @ 12:19:07 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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I love how you fall apart
And how crack under your own pressure
I loved you for letting me
piece you back together just the way I wanted you
You’re a puzzle we cant get right
I was hoping I was the missing peace
but you’ve lost it and
I am out solutions
Now I have to think out side the box
And leave this game behind because
I’m not doing anyone good
and you’re just not good for me
If you ever figure yourself out
Let me know
Because your one beautiful mess
and I know you’d be the prefect picture
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Re: on puzzles
(User Rating: 1 )
by LovingWhispers on
Monday, 26th July 2010 @ 01:45:22 AM AEST
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I am sooo very glad I stopped to read this before I logged out!!
WOW!!
Im sitting here kinda gobsmacked at what to say that would be adequate enough to convey how impressed I am right now.
Many many brilliant lines but my fave???
"Because your one beautiful mess
and I know you’d be the prefect picture"
ok so there are a few typos but nonetheless...I got the jist *smiles*
**applauds** BRAVO!!!
Blessings
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Re: on puzzles
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by chrisdavid on
Monday, 26th July 2010 @ 12:20:13 PM AEST
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Very good. I liked the way you put the words of the poem through a kind of game or puzzle!
Ah, that's it. A puzzle. Clever. |
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