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.. To Be Read The Day i Die ..
Contributed by
rumplestiltskin
on
Tuesday, 20th July 2010 @ 12:25:15 AM in AEST
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i'm withdrawn, i linger trapped inside my anger ..
i'm familiar with life, but i've always been a stranger ..
through my eyes, floods a sea of sadness ..
a breeze of madness, an absent shadow of happiness ..
mixed with resident loneliness, accompanying me to the abyss ..
it's sad that my best moment is the day i die ..
maybe only then, those who mock, will then cry ..
maybe no one will shed a tear the day i lie ..
maybe i won't get a chance to say my final goodbye ..
yet i shall someday be forgotten, tears will someday dry ..
but i wanted to be remembered, so i wrote my final good-bye ..
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rumplestiltskin
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2010-07-20 00:25:15]
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Re: .. To Be Read The Day i Die ..
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by LovingWhispers on
Tuesday, 20th July 2010 @ 12:30:28 AM AEST
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This is kinda cool *smiles*
Well not the subject lol but the way you wrote it and the idea behind it.
You definately have untapped talent!
Blessings
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Re: .. To Be Read The Day i Die ..
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by NathanPaul on
Tuesday, 20th July 2010 @ 02:00:54 PM AEST
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| A little Different. Not Bad, I like. |
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Re: .. To Be Read The Day i Die ..
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by DrcGaimer on
Thursday, 22nd July 2010 @ 02:12:35 PM AEST
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Wow, very deep.
Dark material, but a ray of light as far as creativity. Good job. |
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Re: .. To Be Read The Day i Die ..
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by jordanarce17 on
Thursday, 22nd July 2010 @ 04:24:51 PM AEST
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| good job i see the darkness in it. i have had a feeling like that for 2 years. thank you. |
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Re: .. To Be Read The Day i Die ..
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by lovingcritters on
Thursday, 22nd July 2010 @ 05:05:13 PM AEST
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Each one of us are the sum total of all the experiences in our life, and so, as I read your poem, I remembered as a battered child, each time I was beaten, I'd think "They will cry when I'm dead and gone!. I'm 73 now, and I've out lived them both. Even until the day they died, they insisted that I was a horrible person and deserved all that abuse! I was wrong, if I had died first, they wouldn't have shed a tear! But I'm glad I had the same thought as you have in your poem..........It was simply my way out!
And it served me well, I hope it does for you too!
Great write
Warm love
lovingcritters
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Re: .. To Be Read The Day i Die ..
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by kethley on
Thursday, 29th July 2010 @ 06:46:58 AM AEST
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i love it..
I feel exactly the same way...
I wish I could write something like this..
huhuhuhu |
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Re: .. To Be Read The Day i Die ..
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 29th July 2010 @ 07:54:26 PM AEST
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| I liked it for both the topic and the way it was written. |
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Re: .. To Be Read The Day i Die ..
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by xnickix7 on
Monday, 2nd August 2010 @ 08:03:28 PM AEST
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| You did a great job of expressing yourself here. I really felt the emotion |
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