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Can you see me?
Contributed by
Skezza
on
Sunday, 18th July 2010 @ 10:44:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Can you see me?
I’m climbing the tallest mountain.
Can you hear me?
I’m screaming oh so loudly.
Waiting… Waiting… Waiting…
No one can see me, no one can hear me.
Im not sure I even exsist.
Cant be proud, cant be vein.
Not sure what to do.
Thinking… Thinking… Thinking…
Trouble, Mischief, Chaos
Trying as my last resort.
Now you can see me, now you can hear me.
Is this how you wanted things to be?
Dying… Dying… Dying…
Destroy myself, destroy my life
I hope this makes you happy.
At least you can hear me, at least you can see me.
Im six feet under now.
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Re: Can you see me?
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by texasw97 on
Monday, 19th July 2010 @ 05:33:01 AM AEST
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| This was tight. I love this piece. I feel you all the way. |
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Re: Can you see me?
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by andrewjones12 on
Monday, 19th July 2010 @ 08:05:42 AM AEST
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to be or not to be huh?
love it. |
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Re: Can you see me?
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by Ambivalence on
Monday, 19th July 2010 @ 03:44:31 PM AEST
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funny how many of the good things/people go unnoticed,
yet many of the bad ones get the headlines.
i can see where you're coming from with this one.
i like how u structured your poem too, pretty effective.
take care
-K.Z. |
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Re: Can you see me?
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by RuMPleStiLTSkiN on
Monday, 19th July 2010 @ 04:45:06 PM AEST
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| i can relate, i think we all have been in this situation, well written, i love it :) |
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