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Broken Past
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manic
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Sunday, 18th July 2010 @ 12:24:22 PM in AEST
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Sniffing ideas and life from God's mirror,
Never ending supply, pleasure and pain,
Conscience whispers in your ear,
Past seems like a blood stain,
Round and round you spin,
Life's gravity holds you in,
Unable to break its atmosphere,
Or fly high in the stratosphere,
These chains of guilt hold you back,
Heart softened over time,
Inner demons always attack,
And life seems so sublime,
Each day the sun rises to replace nights black,
But you cant go back in time,
Move forward with an open heart,
That is what your told,
Smiling you listen torn apart,
Too late... you sold your soul!!
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Re: Broken Past
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by The_Unknown on
Sunday, 18th July 2010 @ 02:08:57 PM AEST
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This is a really good poem. We can be our own enemy. You're right, this poem is self explanatory. I can find hidden messages between every line.
Hope to hear more from you,
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Re: Broken Past
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by LovingWhispers on
Sunday, 18th July 2010 @ 07:33:20 PM AEST
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oooh I REALLY liked the feel of this.
So many great lines and the way you finished it was excellent!
"Move forward with an open heart,
That is what your told,
Smiling you listen torn apart,
Too late... you sold your soul!!"
These lines really brought it home.
BRAVO!!!
Blessings
LW |
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Re: Broken Past
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by texasw97 on
Monday, 19th July 2010 @ 05:35:07 AM AEST
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| I like this piece. I too feel this way. Man this was tight. |
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Re: Broken Past
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by Daniellemarie on
Thursday, 29th July 2010 @ 01:29:02 AM AEST
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| I really like the intensity in this poem its so true that we go on each day somtimes unwillingly. |
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Re: Broken Past
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by neverlosehope on
Saturday, 11th September 2010 @ 09:49:55 AM AEST
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hiya
thanks for sharing this poem. you have written it really well. i can see that there is hidden messages. you have managed to express your emotions really well. its a really deep and powerful poem xxx |
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