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Better Day
Contributed by
daledo420
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Thursday, 15th July 2010 @ 11:40:21 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I'm here in body but not the mind
It seems so hard to find
the way to be ok
i try and try until it goes away
today is a new day a new beginning
I cant imagine life without you or an ending
I live for you my reason for Breathing
So i exhale knowing ur there
and living life not having to be scared
knowing the smile is as real as it gets
I love you more than life and u dont know it
I tried to tell u in so many ways
I have put in effort for so many days
So many things that i wish i could say
I will have to wait for the better day
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Re: Better Day
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by The_Writing_Master on
Thursday, 15th July 2010 @ 12:28:56 PM AEST
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| That was beautiful... I'm speechless, 5 stars for you! |
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Re: Better Day
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by ammar on
Thursday, 15th July 2010 @ 01:00:22 PM AEST
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Well-written. You can wait for another day, but make sure you don't leave it till too late.
Peace
Ammar |
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Re: Better Day
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by voyage on
Friday, 16th July 2010 @ 01:03:13 AM AEST
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I know the feeling
and I know the pain
love has no perfect timing
please don't you wait in vain |
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Re: Better Day
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by antikythera on
Sunday, 18th July 2010 @ 05:04:46 AM AEST
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| I'm not a fan of the misspelling unless you're trying to get some sort of effect out of it.....it's not working for me |
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Re: Better Day
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 24th July 2010 @ 02:16:51 AM AEST
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| SIT'S a standard poem at most and it's cliched. You're my life…die without you…reason for living… if you're gonna say cliched sayings say them in a way they've never been said. Express with metaphors similies and analogies. If you're gonna be corny do it with class |
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