|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Suicide Sweet 16
Contributed by
DeLeriousTearZ
on
Wednesday, 16th April 2003 @ 08:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
|
I can picture it now
It seems so clear
The idea I have continued to bare
My birthday seems like such a good time
To escape the hell thats been flying by.
Why put it off?
Why wait for this day?
To show sweet 16 can be so fake.
I'll rejuvenate to a different world
Say goodbye to the Birthday Girl.
The Twenty-Fifth day of the month November
Surely all of you will remember
How 16 candles lie on a forbidden cake
Waiting to be blown out by my spirits shake.
Soon soiceity will talk about
And Heavens skies are filled with doubt.
I gave a new name to "Sweet 16"
One more vulgar...
More obscene.
Its not as sweet as one may think it be
Its just a shortcut to tragedy...
But i can't help if i make it this way
I'm still 16 I can celebrate...
It might be darker and not as Pink
Remembering the blade with just one blink.
"She didn't kill herself...its just a dream
Come on be realistic, it wuz her sweet 16."
Why don't you get what sweet 16 hides?
Its just a day for suicide.
Copyright ©
DeLeriousTearZ
... [
2003-04-16 20:05:00]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Suicide Sweet 16
(User Rating: 1 )
by Metalmouth666 on
Friday, 18th April 2003 @ 11:40:47 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
It's a very good poem, it really is, It seems to me that your trying to show some pain inside that you just want to hide. the whole fact of it being called "sweet 16" who knows how that ever showed up.
15, 16, and 17 are really tough ages, trust me I know, I just turned 18 and it has seemed to get better, as well as some of my friends. Just to tell you create your own sweet 16, as you want it, just make sure your around for your next years, who knows they just might be one of the best years of your life. so stick around... Again, great write.
~MetalMouth666 (Ryan) |
|
|
Re: Suicide Sweet 16
(User Rating: 1 )
by DeLeriousTearZ on
Saturday, 19th April 2003 @ 07:55:33 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Hey, thanx ryan for posting that comment and telling me to hang in .... i'll try! You seem like a great person.*Jo |
|
|
Re: Suicide Sweet 16
(User Rating: 1 )
by Silent-Cry on
Saturday, 19th April 2003 @ 11:34:29 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| i loved it love it loved it!!!!!!!!!! |
|
|
Re: Suicide Sweet 16
(User Rating: 1 )
by grip-wth-broken-fingers on
Friday, 16th July 2004 @ 04:17:38 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
***** brilliant i liek it i liike it aloot i liek all ur poems actually thank u xx read mine
|
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
