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The Moldy Man
Contributed by
JackDylan
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Wednesday, 7th July 2010 @ 12:06:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I met a moldy moldy man
I met his moldy moldy life
I rapped softly on the door
then i met his moldy wife
Hunched into the corner
He couldn't speak a word
He prefered to be seen
Never to be heard.
He hunched his neck to the side
and his eyes bore my way
I tried and failed to whisper
"Maybe I'll come back another day"
It was a crumbly crumbly scene
It was a stingey stingey room
the place stunk of morphine
and ever impending doom
We hunched down close to the man
and looked into his eyes
I felt a surge of insanity
erupt into our lives
Everything was ruined
Nothing left to save
Everybody is evil
We'll all get a grave.
I retreated and gasped for air
Each breath felt short and thin
I looked back at him one last time
and I saw his awful grin.
He was a moldy moldy man
and noone even knew why
Many have tried to find out
many like me, too scared to try.
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Re: The Moldy Man
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by thebadguy9999 on
Wednesday, 7th July 2010 @ 01:13:28 AM AEST
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| Very nice write |
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Re: The Moldy Man
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by omarzz on
Wednesday, 7th July 2010 @ 05:44:29 AM AEST
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| beautifull write |
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Re: The Moldy Man
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by Zeberdee on
Wednesday, 7th July 2010 @ 06:14:00 AM AEST
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| Very impressive |
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Re: The Moldy Man
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by lesoleilnoire on
Wednesday, 7th July 2010 @ 01:26:26 PM AEST
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| The title really got my attention. Your words flow together well in your poem. Great piece of writing. Interesting tale about the moldy man. |
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Re: The Moldy Man
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th July 2010 @ 01:26:31 AM AEST
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| good work, :) |
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Re: The Moldy Man
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by quadira on
Thursday, 8th July 2010 @ 09:10:10 AM AEST
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| flowed nicely, thanks |
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Re: The Moldy Man
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th July 2010 @ 10:59:15 AM AEST
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| Very nice, I liked this |
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