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Imminent Sky
Contributed by
Breezy
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Saturday, 3rd July 2010 @ 06:05:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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You can not will my sky to fall
and I no longer bow to self destruction
but that does not mean I do not bleed--
When words are said without meaning
indifference poisons the soul
Nights that smuggle warmth
trip the day as it smiles sadly,
longing to fall into night’s arms
But he is oblivious to the dawn
He showers the earth with gloom,
taking for granted its delirium
and she will not address intuition
I lost all the glitter the night
had littered into my bed-
sheets lie cold;
the walls are washed in grey
Nursing battle wounds,
I stare at the ceiling
that whispers nights name to me
while sleep hides in the mist
I proposition the sun to find corners
and fill the air with warmth-
for only when I see the sky
do I remember who I am
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Copyright ©
Breezy
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Re: Imminent Sky
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by lesoleilnoire on
Saturday, 3rd July 2010 @ 07:04:50 PM AEST
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Beautiful poem though it is quite sad. The words flowed together perfectly.
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Re: Imminent Sky
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd July 2010 @ 10:08:43 PM AEST
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There seems to an angst here from losing a loved one yet a strength that you've (or that person) has gained from experience.
while sleep hides in the mist you should create your own dictionary. I love the way you referred to insomnia. Of course I love the entire poem too. You have an excellent knack for metaphor.
Tim
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Re: Imminent Sky
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by northernlights on
Sunday, 4th July 2010 @ 03:23:13 AM AEST
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| An overall feel of melancholic struggle to survive and rebuild life,some great lines in this.....indifference poisons the soul, for only when I see the sky do I remember who I am,Your ability to describe with such depth and sensitivity draws the reader right into the emotion and even though both reader and writer have an overall sense of sadness there is a resilience emphasised in the anger expressed in the line......but that does not mean I do not bleed. |
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Re: Imminent Sky
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by thebadguy9999 on
Sunday, 4th July 2010 @ 01:08:41 PM AEST
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| beautiful poem |
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Re: Imminent Sky
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by spud on
Thursday, 8th July 2010 @ 11:51:23 AM AEST
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Hi A
Another gem that touches the stars with its
excellence, imagery, and style. There's a hint
of misfortune that pervades throughout. Poetic
perception rather than candid emotion, I trust?
Tommy
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