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The One (Part I)
Contributed by
DanielPaulling
on
Wednesday, 16th April 2003 @ 02:25:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I wake up
In the morning
To start another
Pointless day
I'm feelin' lonely again
Wish somebody could
Cure this pain
The ache in my heart
I dreamt about her
The girl from all my dreams
The one who's perfect
In every single way
I would do anything
Just to meet her
I would do anything
For her
But I'm sitting here
Thinking about a girl
And how to steal her away
From her world
I wanna be
Someone other than myself
Because if I was
Then I could have her
Copyright ©
DanielPaulling
... [
2003-04-16 02:25:00]
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Re: The One (Part I)
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 16th April 2003 @ 04:21:25 AM AEST
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| well written.. venkat |
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Re: The One (Part I)
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th April 2003 @ 05:05:13 AM AEST
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Great poem.
This is just my opinion but if you have to be something other than yourself to have the woman of your dreams - she isn't really the woman of your dreams. The woman you finally fall in love with should accept you for who you are and love everything about you.
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Re: The One (Part I)
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Wednesday, 16th April 2003 @ 05:41:43 AM AEST
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Welcome to your-poetry.com!!! Lovely write, but I have to agree with Sleepless_siren. A girl should accept you for who you are... and you shouldn't want to be someone else just to get a girl.... Best of luck!!
Jenni |
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Re: The One (Part I)
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by Sk8er909 on
Wednesday, 16th April 2003 @ 10:50:26 AM AEST
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| Very good write. Just be yourself don't try to be someone your not |
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Re: The One (Part I)
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th April 2003 @ 05:18:17 PM AEST
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Thank you for your words on my poem.
The reason I wrote that last stanza was because I'm beginning to think that some girls are really shallow and don't look past skin deep. |
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