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a breeze of careless air.
Contributed by
andrewjones12
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Thursday, 10th June 2010 @ 08:41:34 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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the wind stirs all the air.
and if i think it will ever care.
i'd be wrong.
its everywhere.
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andrewjones12
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2010-06-10 08:41:34] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: a breeze of careless air.
(User Rating: 1 ) by mvvenkataraman on
Sunday, 27th June 2010 @ 09:59:00 AM AEST (User
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Dear respected andrewjone,
Though the poem is crisp
Elaboration will be better
Of course we can't ever trust
Though now the Air cares
One day it may surely stop
As damage is being done
When a soul escapes
The Air has not cared
That is the reason for end
It is everywhere no doubt
But, at a certain stage
It will leave without reasons
At that time only end enters
In a nutshell I love this write
We can infer great meanings
But, we must have to deliberate
The poet has penned a beauty
Still I pray that more words
May make it still more beautiful.
With best wishes, Thanking you, Yours truly,
M V VENKATARAMAN |
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