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YOU TOLD ME
Contributed by
vampire_amilia
on
Wednesday, 9th June 2010 @ 07:22:17 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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YOU TOLD ME WE WERE SOUL MATES
YOU TOLD ME YOU'LL BE THERE FOR ME
YOU TOLD ME YOU'LL BE THERE TO HELP ME TOUGH EVER THING
YOU TOLD ME YOU'LL NEVER LEAVE ME
BUT YOU DID LEAVE ME
NO-ONE CAN FIND YOU
WE SEARCHED AND SEARCHED FOR YOU
THEY SAY YOU'RE DEAD BUT I KNOW YOU'RE NOT
BECAUSE YOU TOLD ME THAT WE WILL ALWAYS FIND EACH OTHER
YOU
TOLD
ME
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2010-06-09 19:22:17] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: YOU TOLD ME
(User Rating: 1 ) by LizSucks on
Wednesday, 9th June 2010 @ 08:41:51 PM AEST (User
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I think everyone deserves honest critique, I hope you don't think I'm being rude, because I'm not. I like the basic idea of the piece, but the wording is very plain and therefore, this is not memorable. It feels very...young. Also, the caps lock takes away from it. But the basic point you are trying to get across is nice and I can connect with it. |
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