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I Am
Contributed by
truthful-lies
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Wednesday, 9th June 2010 @ 02:15:42 PM in AEST
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I Am
I am the song that gets stuck in your head and doesnt seem to come out.
I am a turtle, seeming tough and untouchable on the outside, but on the inside, vulnerable and kind.
I am the song that has just the right melody to match your mood.
I am the unique and odd number seven.
I am the careless jeep you see speeding down the freeway.
I am the comfy rocking chair that always seems to calm you.
I am that sweet and cold slurpie that is very delicious, but eat it to fast and you'll get a heart freeze.
I am the grand piano that is tuned just right.
I am a safe corner to cry in and think.
I am the beatiful fire that warms you and your home, but get to close and might hurt you.
I am a cherry tree, very pretty and sweet.
I am afraid o losing my sanity and harming those i love.
The world behind my eyes if painful.
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Re: I Am
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by alasdaircairns on
Wednesday, 9th June 2010 @ 02:52:12 PM AEST
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| I was just thinking this isn't very angry! Some vivid images conjured up in this piece :) |
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Re: I Am
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by LizSucks on
Wednesday, 9th June 2010 @ 09:17:08 PM AEST
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| I love how you just changed it up completely at the end. I wasn't expecting it, and it was wonderful. The only thing I can see that throws this off a little is the first and third line beginning with "the song..." Perhaps if you moved one of those farther down in the piece, it wouldn't seem quite so repetitive at the beginning. |
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