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burnt out. . .
Contributed by
elle
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Tuesday, 8th June 2010 @ 09:04:54 AM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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your oriental strokes of suicidal typos
& devious zen chantings . . . of "what?"
once, seemed rituals of foreplay
now, pale nuances, that I can't stand
I'm no proofer, at your beck & call
or some silly desk top ornament
I'm not an intellectual
but you can't steal my mind
these scars, my recollection. . .
now, you can have your own
& even as our shadows tangle
like flung, ink-blot, psycho tests
the circle's, you left on my coffee table
prelude. . . a primal cord is struck
now, I'm dancing in your absence
a skinny, silhouette in the buff
let's test our optimism
can we even say we can. . .
I'll smile & wish you well
the rest. . . you're on your own
I've nothing in my closet
but a skeleton of trust.
Copyright ©
elle
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2010-06-08 09:04:54]
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Re: burnt out. . .
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by iodinelove on
Tuesday, 8th June 2010 @ 05:52:28 PM AEST
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I like it, and I agree.
Always, abraham |
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Re: burnt out. . .
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by spud on
Wednesday, 9th June 2010 @ 08:12:33 AM AEST
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Hi Elle,
A fine illustration on how to say goodbye!
Full of intelligence and finality!
Well said.
Tommy
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Re: burnt out. . .
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th June 2010 @ 01:28:08 AM AEST
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I like that... ommmm I tired to read the entire poem with that sound running in my head. but then tripped when happened upon:
now, I'm dancing in your absence
a skinny, silhouette in the buff
Okay...there's that sound again...ommmm
But he/I became fixated with a dancing image..... I am typing with the ommmmm.
Eeeeeven thoooooough you can't heeeeear iiiiiit.....
I am doing it
Ah-men.
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Re: burnt out. . .
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th June 2010 @ 10:05:16 AM AEST
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| ao.. i like it.. keep on writing.. n_n |
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