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Learn to swim
Contributed by
zeberdee
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Sunday, 6th June 2010 @ 03:44:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
political
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As we march through the young forrest
into the adolescent beach of decisions
carrying with them unavoidable collisions
as the forest's naive visions
are slowly, but surely washed away
and the sand beneath you feet
is the only thing that stays
Wheter you drown in the sea
or slowly wash away on the beach
one thing is certain, there is no key
there is no top you cant reach
there is no heaven above us
nothing but religious fuss
you might go crazy now
but live your life like a plow
and grind through the lies
and either die or become wise
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zeberdee
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2010-06-06 15:44:53]
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Re: Learn to swim
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by iodinelove on
Sunday, 6th June 2010 @ 06:10:02 PM AEST
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i think it has a great deal of potential. clean it up a little and fix the spelling errors and you'll have a fine poem on your hands.
always, abraham |
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Re: Learn to swim
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by sidneyconrad23 on
Wednesday, 17th November 2010 @ 07:50:38 AM AEST
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| Really really nice a out standing write you are so right in this old life we live we must learn to swim so we won't go down in the seas of the old world. keep writing what a gift you have. |
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