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Paper Prisms
Contributed by
xXInkInMyVeinsXx
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Sunday, 30th May 2010 @ 12:11:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Sometimes,
I spend hours just lying on the floor,
Watching the sky change from baby blue
To paper white.
I feel like paper,
paper getting torn apart by
the wind and then beaten
into a pulp by the rain.
I wish God had made me a paper person,
Paper can't feel and I feel too much.
When I'm alone my head pounds
With the emotions thumping against my skull.
Wouldn't it be nice to be a paper doll
Within a line of other paper dolls? Then
I would never be alone and always
Have a hand to hold.
But they think I'm already like a paper doll;
Uninteresting,
Cold,
Blank.
No, definitely not a paper doll.
Glass; I'm more like glass.
A prism with too many sides to count,
Some of them ugly
But I reflect rainbows anyway.
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xXInkInMyVeinsXx
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Re: Paper Prisms
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by emystar on
Sunday, 30th May 2010 @ 01:05:59 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC.
I see nothing wrong with you poetry. You got you point across with little words.
good job and again, welcome.
Huggs, blessings,
emy |
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Re: Paper Prisms
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by Nevilleconnie on
Sunday, 30th May 2010 @ 02:22:28 PM AEST
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| You don't suck at writing poems. In fact your really, really good at writing. I can completely understand the struggle in this poem. Just the other day I was wishing I was a statue, and unable to feel anything. This truly was an amazing poem. I hope you decide to write more. |
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Re: Paper Prisms
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by northernlights on
Sunday, 30th May 2010 @ 03:24:28 PM AEST
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| I wish God had made me a paper person, what a great way of looking at life, great concept and imagery in your exploration of your feelings then the glimmer of hope at the end..... but I reflect rainbows anyway. well written |
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Re: Paper Prisms
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by Grace_and_Glory on
Sunday, 30th May 2010 @ 06:13:58 PM AEST
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| OMG this has to be one of my favorites I've ever read! Loved it! sometimes the stuff we write off the top of our heads turns out to be the best! |
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Re: Paper Prisms
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by elle on
Monday, 31st May 2010 @ 11:47:41 AM AEST
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| Dearest, I have to agree with all the other comments. . . that your words definitely set you apart as a poet & an individual, searching, reaching, feeling & finally settling into that glimmer of hope that sustains us, one & all. Beautifully done. Welcome!! elle :) |
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Re: Paper Prisms
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by Grace_and_Glory on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2010 @ 11:19:35 AM AEST
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| I keep coming back to this to read it again :) |
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Re: Paper Prisms
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd June 2010 @ 10:29:08 PM AEST
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I thought you said you sucked at poetry. Sorry, but I must disagree. I really like this, especially considering you wrote it in five minutes. With your imagination, I think you'd get bored after a while being a paper doll in a line with other paper dolls. They can't write like this and just stand around a lot.
Thank you for an enjoyable read and  to YPDC.
Tim
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Re: Paper Prisms
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by unknown_utopia on
Saturday, 5th June 2010 @ 01:22:14 PM AEST
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well done
welcome to the family |
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