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the original clock...
Contributed by
omeoteotl
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Thursday, 20th May 2010 @ 10:06:57 AM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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listen to the original clock
of time
as it ticks
tragically waiting to unwind
before
the last grain has hit
its last breath of upper air
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Re: the original clock...
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by cashfan1 on
Thursday, 20th May 2010 @ 12:32:07 PM AEST
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nice words i really like the style.
look forward to reading more. |
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Re: the original clock...
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by fish on
Thursday, 20th May 2010 @ 08:26:11 PM AEST
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though this is beautiful but did you imagine it in couplets? it may make it more deep and captivating.
great idea and simply put. |
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Re: the original clock...
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by Ambivalence on
Sunday, 23rd May 2010 @ 11:18:48 AM AEST
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scary enough, the last line halted my breath for a split second,
as if a hint of what death feels like...
this was abstract indeed. great write....
take care
-K.Z. |
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