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To The Sea
Contributed by
endeformetrance
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Monday, 14th April 2003 @ 04:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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In crash the waves
Of our lovely lady sea
Upon the dusty beach
She smashes into me
My lungs become her slaves
I’ll thrust out a hand
Shivering in the cool wind
To touch her icy waters
And in her I might find
Something that we’ve lost on land
To feel her lapping caress
Upon my sticky fingertips
And bathe among the salty foam
Is a joy not found in thighs or hips
Or any expensive ladies dress
Now she is the only one for me
I’ve walked this shore alone
For far too long and now
I’m finally through, I’m done
I’m going closer, deeper into the sea.
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2003-04-14 16:05:00]
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Re: To The Sea
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 14th April 2003 @ 04:10:00 PM AEST
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| vividly lovely poem:) hugs nessa |
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Re: To The Sea
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by shelby on
Monday, 14th April 2003 @ 06:27:47 PM AEST
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Thankyou for bringing the sea to the desert for me. This is a wonderful poem.
Michelle |
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Re: To The Sea
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 19th April 2003 @ 06:22:43 PM AEST
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ah. this is a nice one and could be interpreted as a poem about death, or union with god - the sea as a symbol of infinity. the end verse reminded me of the final scene from Death in Venice. has a neat rhythmical structure too. golden williams pear duly awarded.
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Re: To The Sea
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by tease_whizz on
Thursday, 24th April 2003 @ 08:18:50 AM AEST
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| totally agree with the above comment - williams pears all round :) this is vivid, clear and well structured with a depth of emotion i've always liked about your poems. great write, keep them coming, Kate x |
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Re: To The Sea
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 27th April 2003 @ 09:17:56 AM AEST
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Wow! *claps*, again. Whilst reading this i couldn't help feeling it had a pornographic aura, though?!??!?!? Oh the imagery, lalalalala.....
Francesxxx |
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Re: To The Sea
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by Archie on
Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 05:52:11 PM AEST
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| Nice poem, Great rhythym in the beginning almost like a song. |
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