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disappearing
Contributed by
guiltycircles
on
Wednesday, 12th May 2010 @ 06:42:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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your arms wrap tightly
around my insecure frame
your breath caresses my skin
your words a silken layer
love that warms a dying soul
cherishing each dream
evaporating with the laughter
nothing left now
shivering with self-depracation
light dims as the eyes close
on a life of silence
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guiltycircles
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2010-05-12 18:42:39]
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Re: disappearing
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by Chrissylee on
Wednesday, 12th May 2010 @ 07:46:02 PM AEST
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| sometimes its so hard to find the words to write when a relationship breaks up but here you have portrayed those words perfectly... great write keep up the great work. |
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Re: disappearing
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by elle on
Wednesday, 12th May 2010 @ 09:37:43 PM AEST
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Great post!!
"evaporating with the laughter"
consider that. . . nice concept. . . evocative & seductive. . . nice pull, nice flow.
elle :) |
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Re: disappearing
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by Breezy on
Friday, 14th May 2010 @ 07:44:41 AM AEST
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oh damn!! this is beautifully painful!! What
a perfect and emotional way to describe
the most vile of attitudes --loneliness. I
doubt there is a more inauspicious emotion.
But you have really captured the destruction
that accompanies it. Well done.
-- Achelois
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Re: disappearing
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by Ambivalence on
Saturday, 15th May 2010 @ 10:46:59 PM AEST
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u've captured the essence of vanishing in an exceptional emotional way
this was so heartwrenching...
take care
-K.Z. |
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