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Don’t Pity Me
Contributed by
landsleyalexandre
on
Saturday, 8th May 2010 @ 05:18:25 AM in AEST
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I can stand on my own two feet
Spare me the reminder that I came from those lonely streets
Which made me cold as I grew old
Don’t pity me, no don’t pity me at all
I did what was necessary to survive
Build my dreams on hard concrete
Fed myself dust until I couldn’t eat
Why pity me, why pity me at all
Now that I am full, I can use the energy
To do what you could have done
Saved me instead of feeling sorry
Because you pity me, and you pity me until I was no more
So the next time you look down and see me
Remember this, it could have been you not me.
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landsleyalexandre
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2010-05-08 05:18:25]
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Re: Don’t Pity Me
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by DrcGaimer on
Saturday, 8th May 2010 @ 09:21:30 AM AEST
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I love the attitude in this poem. You could have saved, but you didn't. So I will stand on my own, but don't you pity me.
Loved the lines, build my dreams on concrete and fed myself dust until I couldn't eat.
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Re: Don’t Pity Me
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by Chamaron on
Saturday, 8th May 2010 @ 05:25:35 PM AEST
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| Very good, I like the emphasis of coming from "lonely streets", "hard concrete", and "fed myself dust". Very powerful imagery. Well done. |
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