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When I died... :)
Contributed by
619prisoner
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Tuesday, 4th May 2010 @ 03:44:33 PM in AEST
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I died today
My soul flew up high
I waved goodbye to my body
And raised beyond the sky
In this new place
All seemed fine
Until I read a sign
“please wait in line”
Single file, the souls stood
Awaiting their turn
To speak with one person
Whom will inform them if they’ll burn
I could not move
but follow the line and wait
I guess its not bad
Its not like I have a date
It was a sea of clouds
That was our endless floor
And at the end of the line
Was a black and white door
I see a woman
Sitting at a desk
Speaking to the people
Giving them their task
But the words are silent
In fact I head nothing at all
I cannot speak
This is getting rather dull
Like a DMV
On a Monday afternoon
Bring a brown bag
Your not leaving soon
After what seemed years
Of being lost in my head
I am next in line
To find out what happens when you’re dead
The lady was quite pretty
her clothes were what and her skin was pale
white flowing hair and soft pink lips
a mature smile was familiar as well
when she gave me that smile
she spoke in my mind
a sweet voice
with words so kind…
“You never did die
Silly old man
Please wake up
And get to work when you can!”
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Re: When I died... :)
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 4th May 2010 @ 03:51:20 PM AEST
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wouldn't you know there'd be a line there too, lol, oh, the ending was sweet, beautifully written,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: When I died... :)
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by Nevilleconnie on
Tuesday, 4th May 2010 @ 06:00:02 PM AEST
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| This poem was really, really good. I really loved the ending. A great and enjoyable read. |
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Re: When I died... :)
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by northernlights on
Tuesday, 4th May 2010 @ 11:26:43 PM AEST
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| A man having to queue even after he's died lol very amusing write, |
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Re: When I died... :)
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by elle on
Wednesday, 5th May 2010 @ 09:25:40 AM AEST
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| Very enjoyable & I loved the ending. elle :) |
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Re: When I died... :)
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by LadyRose on
Wednesday, 5th May 2010 @ 12:01:47 PM AEST
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| lol.... sweet |
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Re: When I died... :)
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by LadyM on
Wednesday, 5th May 2010 @ 03:42:33 PM AEST
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| Woe unto the old man who wallows in patience. What beautiful art flows from this patience. We should make it last as long as it can then, so we can all benefit from the artists eloquent dialogue with love. |
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