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Temptation
Contributed by
Breezy
on
Tuesday, 27th April 2010 @ 04:55:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Life now moves to the rhythm of you
it dips into the flavour of my desire
directing ripples of colour through
my black and white haze
I want to taste your music
to move inside your symphony
where the walls cave around me
in an earthquake of ecstasy
I want to sway
to kiss the essence of your mystery
to pull it so tightly to me, all the edges
of love spill out the sides and cover me
And when I have consumed the elixir of your soul
I shall ache to taste it once more
Copyright ©
Breezy
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2010-04-27 04:55:59] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Temptation
(User Rating: 1 ) by DarkWolf on
Tuesday, 27th April 2010 @ 05:14:01 AM AEST (User
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this is a well written poem, and it flows so nicely. |
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Re: Temptation
(User Rating: 1 ) by elle on
Tuesday, 27th April 2010 @ 05:37:00 AM AEST (User
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These words are extremely tempting. . . I love the entire poem but the last two lines are stellar! elle :) |
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Re: Temptation
(User Rating: 1 ) by JakerBaker88 on
Tuesday, 27th April 2010 @ 07:08:06 AM AEST (User
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The imagery as well as the flow of your poem were flawless. Whomever inspired this, well, you did them credit. You expressed your longing, love, passion, and desire well. Great work here! |
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Re: Temptation
(User Rating: 1 ) by northernlights on
Tuesday, 27th April 2010 @ 08:46:24 AM AEST (User
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Erotic, sensual,unadulterated desire for more,excellent write |
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Re: Temptation
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 27th April 2010 @ 10:55:06 AM AEST (User
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Only once more? Such a tease!
No, for real though, this poem has some great metaphor and imagery for that thing called temptation. Thoroughly enjoyable, relatable, and excellent writing.
Thank you,
Tim
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Re: Temptation
(User Rating: 1 ) by spud on
Tuesday, 27th April 2010 @ 11:27:21 AM AEST (User
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Hi,
Hot! Red hot!
Sizzling, rapturous, passionate ...... and greedy - cos you want more!!
Beautiful poetry.
Tommy
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Re: Temptation
(User Rating: 1 ) by duff on
Tuesday, 27th April 2010 @ 05:57:42 PM AEST (User
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A seductive write full of sensuality that lures the eyes from line to line eager to read what follows. Gorgeous imagery from beginning to end and overall a wonderfully written poem. You have a beautiful talent for capturing emotion and its a pleasure to read your work.
U/E |
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Re: Temptation
(User Rating: 1 ) by aliopterix on
Tuesday, 27th April 2010 @ 06:13:13 PM AEST (User
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What a simply exquisite write. And when I have consumed the elixir of your soul I shall ache to taste it once more. So beautiful. Many wonderful metaphors. Absolutely superb. Aliopterix.
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Re: Temptation
(User Rating: 1 ) by lesoleilnoire on
Tuesday, 27th April 2010 @ 08:19:10 PM AEST (User
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So beautifully written. The images are amazing and make the reader feel, see, hear, and taste temptation. I am in awe!
Heidi |
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Re: Temptation
(User Rating: 1 ) by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 28th April 2010 @ 12:21:12 PM AEST (User
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AhhhhhhhhhhAchelois, I may be 73......but I still have a wonderful memory!
The essence of your poem was so exhilarating, so passionate, like music that reaches a cresendo..........powerful, not controlled. It truly was amazing........it lifted my soul!
Your poems are refreshing, and I like your desire want to read and taste even more.
Warm love
consue |
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Re: Temptation
(User Rating: 1 ) by windowguy on
Sunday, 2nd May 2010 @ 02:35:44 AM AEST (User
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Phew! Potent stuff! |
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Re: Temptation
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Monday, 3rd May 2010 @ 07:27:27 PM AEST (User
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~*:wow*:~
hugs n' love nessa
roses roses roses |
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Re: Temptation
(User Rating: 1 ) by Anoo on
Saturday, 22nd January 2011 @ 07:23:31 AM AEST (User
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Your poems are highly inspiring. Moving inside a symphony- love the imaginative powers. Unlimited.
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