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Rage
Contributed by
Chamaron
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Sunday, 25th April 2010 @ 01:55:08 AM in AEST
Topic:
psychoticpoems
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I want to rage
Until the corners can feel me
I want to bleed
Before Noah can save the world
I want to scream
Until no one hears me
So I know it’s all true
Everything you’ve never said
In such plain words
I want to scratch
This handmade doll of me apart
Scraps to begin with
Maker’s worst edition
I want to cry
So hard I laugh
At the gushing irony
Feel this here
In my side
To know I was never real
I want to die
A loud, clean death
With an echo that never forgives
And no mess to fuss over
Can't trip on false alibis
I hope there are
Separate rings of hell for us
Because I want to live in a place
Where you’ve never breathed
Copyright ©
Chamaron
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2010-04-25 01:55:08] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Rage
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Sunday, 25th April 2010 @ 02:28:22 AM AEST (User
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Well don't know what brought this on but I sure hope you feel better.
I'd say you captured your subject well.
smiles,
emy |
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Re: Rage
(User Rating: 1 ) by LyssaM on
Sunday, 25th April 2010 @ 07:39:57 AM AEST (User
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I love the last 4 verses of the poem. It really brings out the need for you to want to get away from that person. Awesome read. |
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Re: Rage
(User Rating: 1 ) by Breezy on
Sunday, 25th April 2010 @ 09:20:27 AM AEST (User
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Oh this is just fantastic!! You've a real skill for writing
emotion. Love the word choices and imagery. And
that last verse? b r i l l i a n t !! This is poetic perfection!
Excellent, excellent post! -- Achelois
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Re: Rage
(User Rating: 1 ) by kessembi on
Wednesday, 16th June 2010 @ 12:44:55 PM AEST (User
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I want to cry
So hard I laugh
At the gushing irony
^ ^ These words sing to me. Great job! |
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Re: Rage
(User Rating: 1 ) by dypsomaniac on
Monday, 27th September 2010 @ 09:16:18 PM AEST (User
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very nice stuff.......it should be mandatory for everyone on this site to read that ending. |
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