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Cloud Of Unknowing
Contributed by
daylynn_van_wyk
on
Saturday, 10th April 2010 @ 01:59:18 AM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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On the cloud of unknowing
where the stars aren't out of reach
hidden in mists of this purple twilight
I watch life blossom upon a plastic beach.
My tears merge with this fluffy sponge,
tear’d from salty breathes of the seas below,
lonely whispers entertain my crazed thoughts
as the land falls beneath my gloomy shadow.
An eclipse of my uncertainty clouds the land
darkness conceals the love I hold deeply,
On the cloud of unknowing I stand
on the edge, but an angel's voice keeps me.
The sunshine soon lights up a path
the world looks up into the clouds,
I jump into the unknown
and begin my voyage into your heart.
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2010-04-10 01:59:18]
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Re: Cloud Of Unknowing
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by Aspirant on
Saturday, 10th April 2010 @ 04:03:03 AM AEST
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| I'm not sure I can explain my feelings about this poem charged with creativity and mystery. It describes a dark psychology and reconciles it with something forgotten and left behind in childhood. It flows beautifully and converges to produce something in the shape of meaning which, while intuitive, is somehow hard to firmly grasp. I look forward to reading more of your work! |
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Re: Cloud Of Unknowing
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by aliopterix on
Sunday, 11th April 2010 @ 04:46:43 AM AEST
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| Beautiful abstract and almost surreal imagery which conveys a definite message. Nice write. Look forward to reading more. Aliopterix. |
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