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Vampira
Contributed by
aliopterix
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Thursday, 8th April 2010 @ 12:24:36 AM in AEST
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Vampira
Shall I compare you to a summer’s rose?
Or perhaps to the insidious vampire bat?
You’ve sucked the financial life blood out of me
And your nose is small, podgy and flat.
At first I was mesmerised by your eyes.
Transfixed I could not possibly leave your side.
But then just imagine my total surprise
To find others along for the ride.
I suppose I’m lucky to be a banker
And privy to the debts of others’
Until I realised I was a wanker
And these poor saps were my adulterous “brothers”!
So I sit here lonely as a cloud, quite happy
As I’m in Barbados now with my embezzled fortune.
I sincerely hope that you’re feeling crappy
But it won’t take long to find another loon.
Alistair Muir
07/04/2010
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Re: Vampira
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by spud on
Thursday, 8th April 2010 @ 06:46:53 AM AEST
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Hi,
Would I be right in guessing that this is directed to
an ex-partner of the female variety??
If so, been there, suffered similar bloodletting,
and have the torn Tshirt to prove it!
Out of chaos drips a little humour.
Spot on!
Tommy
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Re: Vampira
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th April 2010 @ 11:33:48 AM AEST
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What an off the wall hilarious write! It's a nice change to read something of new variety and you did that wonderfully here. Humor is never easy but you pulled it off and this was a joy to read.
take care
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Re: Vampira
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th April 2010 @ 09:22:33 PM AEST
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Oh wow. What a fun write. But just a sidebar to spud, (Tommy)... there are those of the male persuasion who are a breed of vampire all their own! :P
This flowed so well and that last stanza? Awesome! Especially that third line! :D I really enjoyed this post.
Seléne ~
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Re: Vampira
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 8th April 2010 @ 09:41:11 PM AEST
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lol... that is great!!!!  |
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Re: Vampira
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by Loende on
Saturday, 10th April 2010 @ 04:20:25 PM AEST
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You've used humor to deliver a fantastic
piece about a topic that is much less than
funny. Glad you could see a silver lining.
(Sadly, it's not a phenomenon that is strictly
attached to the X chromosome.)
Great job!
Be well,
~Loende |
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