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taken back
Contributed by
elle
on
Sunday, 4th April 2010 @ 12:19:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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suspicious of that day
the day that we simply let go. . .
& waded into the dank nothingness
that wrapped itself, copious, about our necks &
down the throats. . . a superlious gag
a garrote-like jewel of upheaval
a contemptuous snare. . .
the helpless flailing
fearlessly sinking
& in that sinking, upset
submersed
within the tightening
of jaw
of mind
of eyes wide shut. . .
that is. . .
the way of mistakes
deception that reels tempest
in torment on the tender precipise
of lips. . .
trembling. . . sweetly
yours. . . mine. . .
we both indulged
spinning. . . meaningless. . . 'til spent. . .
to desperate dross
of falsehood, our non-realities gapping
forth a crystalline creature
whose every facet loomed
a ghastly maw of servitude
& into the stillness
that still, merciless necessity. . .
tumultuous thoughts
tumble
until you become a peeling off
in that most hidden of realms, forgotten
in the womb of my attrition
barren. . .
strained. . .
I feel the strain creeping
the pain splitting into shivers. . .
the chill that violates
even to the weary depths & layerings of your heart
is nothing more than the ancient shudder
of my disbelief. . .
the pain seeping into
a wretched decedant, the faint semblance of love
forsaken in the gloaming
disembodied. . .
a silent scream
Copyright ©
elle
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2010-04-04 00:19:59]
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Re: taken back
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 4th April 2010 @ 08:34:36 AM AEST
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A very gripping write elle that has layers upon layers of wonderful imagery for the reader to soak up and marvel at. Dark in depth this is chilling to read but a joy as well. great write
take care
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Re: taken back
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 4th April 2010 @ 09:17:49 AM AEST
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elle, I am speechless. This is so perfectly descriptive. You have an incredible skill for
explaining emotion with your words. I felt each one sear through me with every line.
This. Is. Remarkable.
And so unmistakably poetic. Excellent post, my friend.
Seléne ~
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Re: taken back
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by lesoleilnoire on
Sunday, 4th April 2010 @ 07:18:34 PM AEST
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Amazing...I am awestruck with the beauty of this poem. I can visualize the layers of emotions and thoughts here. Beautiful poem!
Heidi |
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Re: taken back
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 4th April 2010 @ 11:55:11 PM AEST
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| I have read this nine to ten times now and still cannot stop being impressed. This seems to come from a place in you that one would not seem to notice from the surface because you are so sweet and that, my dear, is damn incredible writing. |
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Re: taken back
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by venkat on
Monday, 12th April 2010 @ 07:47:18 PM AEST
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| I am wondering this poem is like a memory of love and beautiful torture. Excellent write... God bless :-) venkat |
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