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~She softly fades away~
Contributed by
shelby
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Tuesday, 9th March 2010 @ 09:12:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
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She softly fades away
with a contusion to her heart.
Melting into puddles
broken by her hurt.
There is the woman
all the world does see.
Then there is another
fading so desperately.
He wrapped her up
in his lunacy
holding her so tight
she could hardly breath.
She softly fades away......
The Heavens cry,
the stars cease to shine.
The world collides
with fractures in her heart.
and she softly fades away.
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shelby
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2010-03-09 21:12:03]
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Re: ~She softly fades away~
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by northernlights on
Tuesday, 9th March 2010 @ 11:10:44 PM AEST
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| There is the woman all the world does see, then there is another, very powerful line, then the brokeness, from a strong heart beating to nothing, the lament is in the softness of the mood of the poem, well written |
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Re: ~She softly fades away~
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th March 2010 @ 11:19:12 PM AEST
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This stirred a lot of thoughts and emotions in me. I think his ass should be kicked and my heart cries for hers. 
Nicely done, Micheller.
Tim |
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Re: ~She softly fades away~
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by Inchiostro on
Tuesday, 9th March 2010 @ 11:27:38 PM AEST
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Wow, very well written, it is truly a sad painting, the vividness is matched only by the heartfelt pain that is in every line of this poem, thanks for yet another great piece
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-Brandon
PS extra points for using a word off my favorites list "Contusion" :D Beautiful |
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Re: ~She softly fades away~
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 12th March 2010 @ 05:07:41 PM AEST
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Gosh, I can't even begin to express the depth of sadness that has befallen me. You've a wonderful gift for exacting emotion from your reader. Or perhaps, its the fact that most know what "she" went through. A very sad thing to have someone hurt you in this way. In any way, really. The human race is hopeless. So much pain and anguish.
Beautiful writing, though. A wonderful piece of melancholy. Thank you for sharing.
Seléne ~
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Re: ~She softly fades away~
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by manbeast on
Wednesday, 7th April 2010 @ 06:13:43 PM AEST
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| Intriguing poem. I enjoyed reading it, thanks for sharing. |
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Re: ~She softly fades away~
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 3rd May 2010 @ 11:29:31 AM AEST
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heart tugging, so sad, so beautifully written,
hugs n' love nessa |
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